Juketsu's RP Sample (Approved)

The entire room was black and quiet with the only light creeping under all four doors coming from the kitchen stove’s faded light. The silence was perfect and made the ideal sleeping environment for all four students. Breaking the silence was the dreadfully loud knocks on the front door which echoed through the room which can only be assumed to wake everybody up. His eyes being forced open from the noise, waking to the shadowy white walls of his room and constant beating of the front door. Letting out a yawn Juketsu reached under his pillow and reached for his phone. Clicking a button on its side his dark room was now illuminated by a pale white light coming from his phone and looking at the screen he noticed it was 4:06 am.

“What the hell." He said putting his phone back under his pillow as the knocking continued and he absolutely refused to get up and answer it because of his current mood. The knocking went on for a couple of more minutes until it was stopped with the opening of two doors. Assuming that one door was that of one of his roommates and the other was the front door Juketsu could finally get back to sleep. Closing his eyes his mind slowly started to slip back into dream land as the room returned to its quiet state. Thinking everything was over he was woken up again by a louder beating. This time the beating was on his door and his roommates door whose room was next to his across from the bathroom. Opening his eyes again Juketsu began to get up slowly, his body still feeling the effects of just waking up twice and his mind telling him to attack somebody on sight.

Grabbing his doorknob he opened it revealing the cause of the steady beating. One of his roommate’s friends was the cause of the knocking and looking across the room he saw one of his roommates door opened and also saw him bringing out some sheets. “Yea man can I sleep at the foot of your bed?” The friend said to Juketsu in a whining tone as it seems something happened to force him here this time of the day. “No man. I got no room this bed is pretty small.” Juketsu replied with an honest tone not wanting to sound rude but also not wanting to let the man sleep in his bed. “Come on bro, I can sleep at the foot of the bed. I got nowhere else to sleep.” The friend said desperate to sleep in somebody’s bed no matter what. “Look bro. I have an early class tomorrow so I can’t handle...” Juketsu tried to say as his sentence was interrupted by his roommate across the hall calling his friend.

“Man come over here and sleep on the sofa.” The roommate said catching the attention of his friend while carrying some sheets to him. The friend said nothing as he walked over to the roommate taking the sheets and going to the sofa. Just like the roommate’s friend Juketsu remained silent closing his door and making the slight noise of locking it. With everything that happened Juketsu didn’t even want to put his cover on. Falling on his bed he laid his head on the pillows and closed his eyes yet again.

Well, I'm tired and pissed due to other things, so this'll be short and not-so-sweet. It's stiff, stale, and boring. You do a horrible job of even describing the environment. I see a lot of issues here, I just can't find the words for them.

*Facepalm*

Give me a few minutes/hours Juketsu and I will give a proper critique. One that actually properly addresses your sample and everything.