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Mitsuhiro Tokiyama

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PostSubject: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved)   Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved) Icon_minitime4/19/2011, 6:56 pm

Name: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama

Age: 297

Visual Age: 26

Years since Entrance into the Gotei 13: 250

Gender: male

Division: 5th

Rank: Captain

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Personality: Tokiyama always acts in an aristocratic manner, seeming always serene and apathetic towards other people, even when he is actually deeply conflicted. He is extremely calm, even in battle, and is very seldom surprised by even the most drastic of actions, or events.

Tokiyama does however generally acts indifferent, bordering on arrogance, to most situations that he is faced with how he generally veiws his opponent as weak. Despite this trait, Tokiyama is a very perceptive man and is fully aware of the limits of his abilities. His attitude as a whole was crafted through his years of hardship and defeating his enemies but its just a lie used to protect himself from emotional strains

Tokiyama does have a strong sense of pride in law and order. As a Captain in the Thirteen Court Guard Squads, he always works hard for a peaceful society. He feels that if someone in his position does not follow the rules as a good example, then no one will follow them. Because of this righteous attitude Tokiyama has shown open disdain for those who have been dishonorable towards Soul Society or who he finds to be annoying or overconfident.

As a Captain he is rarely seen smiling, always having a cold stare as he walks about the Divisions, and Soul Society as a whole. In Captain's meetings he openly voices his opinion if an idea does not seat well with him. However if it's a direct order he asks nothing and fulfills his duties, expecting the same from his Squad, and even other Captains


Fighting Style: Tokiyama focuesly mainly on the use of Kido in tandem to his zanpakuto skills. When combining both he prefers to lead his enemy on into a trap while downplaying his zanpakuto's ability to further misdirect his enemies. His agility is also a factor in most fights as he is extremely light on his feet, and can move at a quick rate while reacting almost at a passive level. his hand-eye coordination is top notch.

His kido is argueably one of the most balanced within Soul Society as his use of hado, and bakudo work in sync with one another and highlighting the weakness and strength of both.

Background: Tokiyama was born in rokongai district where he was subject to harsh living condition. Having to steal and kill for what others did not crafted Tokiyma into a cunning warrior. His small body let him creep throughout distrist under the cover of night. His large amount of reishi at his age increasing his power,through time hee learned to use it Tokiyama found himself targetted by gangs, and slayers within the dark alleys of the Zaraki district.

By the age of 60 Tokiyama had enough battle experience to rival that of most unranked academy students. A few years later he would join the shinigami academy. During his first two years Tokiyama wasn't much of a model student he fought a lot out of remarks made of other students veiws, and abilities. His teacher were viewed as two slow as he felt he was being slowed down by other students. By his 4th year he had released his zanpakuto and was well on his way into the 6th division. hunting other Soul reapers was easy fo Tokiyama, hunting your own kind was the easist of fights, and soon that too boring. Only when he was transferred to the 5th did he noticed his enjoyment of kido and it's countless uses.

His best subject in school was now his greatest interest. 123 years later he was Vice-Captain, and 6 years after that the 5th was his own squad, his promotion to Captain boosting his chances at testing his kido abilities.

During the White Rebellion Tokiyama battled a horde of hollows attacking the soul society pushing them back he later fought an arrancer claiming to be an Espada, it was revealed through his poor battle tactics that he was nowhere near that level. This have gotten boring lately but constant training has entertained him sense.


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PostSubject: Re: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved)   Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved) Icon_minitime4/26/2011, 5:46 pm

Just so you know, we do not like the "learning from my father who was a Captain" idea. This is because it prevents anyone from making a Vizard for that division unless that Vizard is the father of the shinigami, or they are really old, which is not allowed. It prevents people from creating a character they want to have which isn't fair to the roleplayer. Please change that part of the background.

Also, in your background, you state that Nash became Captain of his father division which is the 6th Division. Well, last time I checked, I am the Captain of the sixth division. So please change that too. You could say that he joined the 6th Division, but transfered to the 5th Division and then became the Captain of that division, but that is only one possibility. You can choose a different one if you wish.
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PostSubject: Re: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved)   Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved) Icon_minitime4/29/2011, 7:42 pm

Tokiyama does however generally acts indifferent,
bordering on arrogance, to most situations that he is faced with as how
he rarely views his opponent as weak.

Color me confused on this line but I really don't know what you are saying here.

With your new background you have a few lines that make me raise my eyebrows. The idea that he has killed so many souls and is still allowed to become a shinigami doesnt make a lot of sense. I mean yes, Zaraki district I get it, but there are limits even for that place. Maybe change the line a bit because that really doesn't sound right.

And then

By his 4th year he had released his zanpakuto
and was well on his way into the 6th division. hunting other Soul
reapers was easy fo Tokiyama, hunting your own kind was the easist of
fights, and soon that two got boring.


While it isn't clear, I am assuming you mean that he goes around hunting and kiling soul reapers. That would be ground for jailing/excecution. Not eventual promotion to 5th division captain.

And your new backstory doesn't seem to fit that well with the old personality. I would like a reason as to why he acts aristrocratic and doesn't view opponents as weak or something when you have him be trained to be a killer and apparently hunt Soul Reapers when he was younger. They just do not seem to mesh well. Would recommend a rewrite of one of the two.
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PostSubject: Re: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved)   Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved) Icon_minitime5/11/2011, 3:23 pm

The 6th division is the hunting squad one of the most combat efficeint hey also normally deal with soul reapers that's why they have the largest Prison cells in terms of the other squads cells. They are kind of like a swat team.
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PostSubject: Re: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved)   Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved) Icon_minitime5/11/2011, 4:10 pm

wasn't that the 2nd division?
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PostSubject: Re: Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved)   Mitsuhiro Tokiyama (Approved) Icon_minitime5/11/2011, 10:50 pm

Going by the blurb on the division description Toki is correct. It just wasn't clear that you were hunting them as part of your job. Considering the rest of your profile it sounded like he just goes around murdering other shinigami for shits and giggles.

However I still would like the other changes. Maybe some explanation of why he acts aristocratic despite being from the worst of the worst division. Is it a coping mechanism? Is it his way of trying to step past his original home? Did this only come about once he was fairly high in the ranks?

Still want that line changed about how he killed more souls then most people killed hollows. I seriously don't like that line especially since a character like that is more suited for 11th division where that is a plus and would likely be problematic anywhere else in the divisions. You don't want the leader of the capture and detainment squad to be a mass mass murderer of souls. Would worry the other captains that choose if he could become the new captain.

Also just noticed you don't have anything about the white rebellion war so I would like that added as well.
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