Iado's Zanpakutō

Name: Hikaru

Zanpakuto Spirit Appearance:
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Zanpakuto Spirit Personality: (In-Progress)
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Release Phrase:
Masame Hikaru ("Become Sunlight")


Family:
Light/Fire

Level: Bankai

Sealed Zanpakuto:

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Shikai:

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Shikai Ability:
In her shikai form, Hikaru is a longstaff which is used by Iado to either bring light to dark places or repel any weak hollows with the bright light she emits.

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Bankai Release Phrase:
Bankai! Avatar From Above

Bankai Ability:
"Imbues" Iado with a raiment of light, that constantly emits a blinding light unless he decides to cease it. His staff's passive powers are significantly stronger than before; for instance not only he can repel a hollow of a gillian's level but also gives off an aura that can scare off any dark presence within 1-2 km.

Techniques:
Ray of Light:
Iado can strike his foes with a blast of light, like a magnified sunbeam( similar to Gandalf's) that can blind and ward off his enemies. In bankai, he can use a stronger level of this which can also inflame his enemies depending on the time they have been exposed to it and the distance between him and his enemies. It's length varies between 100-200 meters depending on the amount of reishi he depletes. It can pierce through anything that he has tested it against so far.

Cooldown: 2/3 posts(Shikai/Bankai) Duration: 3/4 posts

Divine Penance:
A powerful ranged spell used by Iado to strike his enemies with the use of sparkly and holy barrages of reishi. These barrages can either knock back his enemies or act like lighting bolts, reducing them to scorched remains depending on the amount of reishi he uses.

Cooldown:3-4 posts(Bankai) Duration:1 post Casting Range: 100 metres (maximum)


Holy Nova:
Causes an explosion around Iado. Anyone within a radius of 70 metres and 50 metres of height is knocked back while his zanpakuto is in its Shikai form. While his Bankai is active it engulfs all his enemies caught up in the explosion with bright yellow 'holy' flames, which scorch their enemies and also can devour a certain amount of his enemies' reiatsu.

Duration:1 post Casting Time: 2 posts Cooldown:5 posts

Ah also, everytime he uses one of his abilities, the red diamond at his staff's head glows brightly with a yellow light. It should be something like a warning because his abilities are a bit overpowered.

ok, not a mod, but friendly advice. You really, really, REALLY don't want to make your moves overpowered in any way, shape, or form. Make em as balanced as possible, a a warning light, I think, just ain't enough.

First thing. You can't have abilities that are specifically hollow warding just because they are a "bright light". Hollows aren't shadows and their is no such thing as a "holy" light that would push back the "unholy" hollows. Doesn't work that way since hollows aren't unholy in the first place and when you are already a death god you can't have blessed holy light.

So while your ability may be to emit light, it can't just repel weak hollows. Not on its own at least. If they stay away because you are a captain that is one thing. Just because you are emitting light is a whole different issue.

Same with your bankai ability. You can't just repel hollows because you are bright. And what the heck is a "dark presence" in a bleach RP anyway? And a passive ability that works for 1-2 km is freaking ridiculous.


Ray of light needs more explanation. How much flame appears on the opponents body? Are they just slightly singed or engulfed in an inferno (better not be the latter or there needs to be a change in other areas). And you say it depends on how long and for how far they are away. Kind of need an explanation then or at the very least an example. 2 posts at 50 meters? 4 posts at 100? 4 posts at 200? At least two examples would be good so we can extrapolate from there.

Also you say it can "pierce" through anything Iado has tested it on. First off what do you mean by pierce? Is the ray of light actually blowing holes in stuff? Or is it somehow just going through objects without breaking them down but without being stopped by the material. And you can't say that it works on everything Iado has tested it on without explaining what Iado has tested it on. It honestly tells the reader nothing.



For Divine Penance I am a bit confused by what type of shape the "holy" barrage looks like. Is it a series of reishi beams? Is it like reishi rain? Is there a number of attacks released and how much area do they engulf? Also considering your zan is light/fire I would prefer you say they are life fireballs in some way rather then lighting bolts. Also, once again you say depending on how much energy Iado puts in. Well how much is it? Half his energy for them to turn fiery? A tenth? All? Just want some idea of how much energy is used up for fiery death.

Oh and also what level of enemy are you reducing to "scorched remains" because unless you are putting in almost all of your energy you aren't going to instantly turn a high level espada into "scorched remains". A better explanation is that the barrage can simply push back the enemy or be used as a barrage of (fireballs, fire beams, fire droplets? Still unsure about the shape this barrage is taking).


Holy Nova can't eat other enemies reiatsu.


I think that is a fair starting point for edits. Mostly its just better explanation for now. We will see if things need to be toned down a bit once I get more information.