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PostSubject: Zafaron's Book   Zafaron's Book Icon_minitime11/11/2010, 3:06 pm

So for the past few months I have slowly been writing a fantasy book while also juggling video games, schoolwork, and of course the forum. I did this back on one of the old sites and decided to do it here as well. Below is a copy of my first chapter that I wrote. So far my favorite since chapters 2 and 3 are full of boring descriptions and exposition while this one starts out right into the action. I would love some critiques. Anything good, bad, confusion, or otherwise please share it. I put a lot of work into this thing and I want to make it as great as I can.

But anyways, read on. And get ready, it is 12 and half pages in word so expect something long.

And just one thing, I really like a little bit of thought put into any comments or critiques you have. Just saying "wow, that was a great chapter" doesn't do much besides stroke my ego but it won't help me improve. Of course I don't want flaming either but I doubt anyone would do that. So please, any help or advice would be accepted.


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And yes, I did just copy paste the entire topic from Awakening.
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